If I were to describe myself I would say that I come off as very quiet at first but as soon as a conversation is stirred up, I am an outspoken and funny person. I was born on December 9th, which makes me Sagittarius. I enjoy helping people simply because I feel that if you give to others, you will always receive something back in return. As Francis of Assisi states "For it is in giving that we receive." I live strongly by that quote. I share a passion for singing and playing badminton. Many people would not know that I sing although I am a member of the Milton High Chorus ensemble. I like the sport tennis because it gets very competitive and serious. I like sports that require putting in effort because then it makes me want to put a lot more effort into winning because losing will not be an option. Whenever I play tennis and win I gain a lot more confidence and it makes me feel good about myself. I also like running which is why I have been looking forward to joining the Cross Country Team this year in hopes of boosting my speed and agility. I like traveling a lot; during the 16 years of my life I have traveled to 5 states and 3 countries.
The country that I enjoyed the most was Antigua and Barbuda because My moms side of the family resides over there, and I am always fascinated and eager to be able to visit them and learn more about their customs and what they do opposite from me.
Much of my prior school years were never as enticing as this year so far. I am finally able to call myself a junior and the more that I think about it, the more I realize that I'm on my way to exploring the world and being able to fend for myself. My effort was good throughout high school but Junior year makes me want to push myself a lot more, not just because this is basically the last year to show colleges what I am really about but because I conclude that it will help me grow as a person and allow me to experience other choices that could build me into becoming a better person.
I like traveling a lot. Of the 16 years of my life I have traveled to 5 states and 3 countries. The country that I enjoyed the most was Antigua and Barbuda because My moms side of the family is located over there, and I find it very interesting to be able to visit them and also learn more about their customs and what they do differently from me. I am still very much trying to figure out who I am as a person but I felt that by giving you a glance as to what I enjoy and see myself as you would gain a better understand as to who I want to be in life. I am still very much trying to figure out who I am as a person but I felt that by giving you a glance as to what I enjoy, you would gain a better understanding as to who I am.
Thanks Aaliyah. I look forward to working with you again this year. Your writing has certainly improved. The reference to badminton made me chuckle. It caught me off guard. I do have two suggestions for you. You really need to work on using more commas in your writing. Try rereading this and see where you might benefit from a comma. Some of your sentences are tough to follow because they are long. You have to tell your reader where he should pause. If you don't do that, your message will get jumbled. Also, be careful about using the word "strong" and "strongly." Think about what those words really mean. Can one really live "strongly"? I don't think so. Pay close attention to the words you choose. It matters.
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