If someone were to ask me
"Who are you?" I would say Taylor Avery. A girl who likes learning
and making new friends. A girl who always runs with her mom. A girl who has the
best family to love and comfort her. A girl who always talks to herself and
dances around the house while listening to music. But I don’t think those will
be the answers that that person would want. So, I would say, “I don’t know
yet”. But this is what I know now. I have dedication, I don’t stop until I get
what I want or do what I want. But sometimes I’m afraid to speak up because I
think people might judge me or make fun of me. When I do speak I say the most
ridiculous things that no one usually cares about. But what they don’t know is
that the most ridiculous thing could be the smartest thing that person has
every heard. I am unique and special. I want to overcome that fear of being
ridiculed because I really am a fighter and a believer. I have been called negative
things like selfish or stubborn but that’s just the “sometimes” me and I can’t
change me. I try and fail but never fail at trying. So, honestly when people
ask me this question I don’t know the answer to it because I don’t exactly know
who I am yet. But I am learning. There are still years and years for me to live
to actually figure out who I really am. I am just a 16-year-old girl now, naïve
in this new world not knowing who anyone really is. I will discover who I
really am; when I’m on my death bed about to say my last words. But if you want
a straight forward answer right now, you’re going to get one. I am Taylor
Avery, and I am me.
Taylor, please be careful about run-on sentences. I'm not sure if you were running your sentences together intentionally or accidentally. Regardless, if this was a stylistic decision, don't overdo it. Otherwise this is fairly well written, although, I confess it is not very engaging. I found it a bit repetitive. I am sure you are a more interesting person than this post implies. I wish you would have provided a specific example, or some tangible evidence that would provide a better description.
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